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Aqua-marine eyes avert from a subdued glance,
though her curt smile doesn't hide the warmth
reflecting back to me - a window doesn't show
it's faults nor gestures of antiquity; it promotes
what you want to see or long for.

We're miles apart, but I feel her spirit waver
in a distant shroud of enigmas, yet her shadows
dance in anticipation every time I'm around the bend
seeking comfort - a door leading to her moss-covered
niche; bearing true witness to her soul.

She may be the angel in my dreams - wings
holding me with charitable grace, not knowing
all the quiet things, but willing to ease a man's
frail mind - a home rich in warmth and love;
where windows and doors lead somewhere.
©2007-2009 ~LilithLairPoetry
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Author's Comments

This is brand spankin new, and man writing poetry is like a taking a shit, I had to squeeze this one out and still make it sound good...as opposed to smelling good?


My best friend Angie, has been there for me and well I wanted to write a poem for her.

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:iconlockethehunter:
*smack*
You just put an image in my head...an image of you taking an enormous shit.
Just for that, not faving x_X

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I Rly Lk Fllng n Th Blnks
:iconlilithlairpoetry:
LMAO!!!

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:iconsynchrochick007:
lol *ignores rude comment about shitting* I thought the poem sounded very distant and confused. like your mind is somewhere else and you're not quite sure about your emotions.

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...and then the words seemed to fly off the page and weave themselves into a beautiful picture...

Behold. the powers of the mighty Beatnik :meditate:
:iconlilithlairpoetry:
Yep, that's the trick in this poem, all the nice descriptions and yet I still feel confusion on where I want it to go at times. Then when she's there either in spirit or in person, then I find my place with hers.

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:iconjedi-gemstone:
Poems really sweet

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Solitare is like life, just because you have all the ace's, all the right things, doesn't mean you'll necesarily win.
~Self-InjuryClub
*EverybodyPlush
:iconfllnthblnk:
Nice poem. Good flow.

"[its] faults nor gestures of antiquity; it promotes"

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Clearfield Review: Prose, Poetry, Art.
:iconlilithlairpoetry:
Thanks for the fix there, I was hesitant at that part and was saying it over and over in my mind but never made the change and was too tired to re think other ways..:)

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:iconlilithlairpoetry:
Thanks Aimee! :hug:

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:iconaingealdorcha:
I like the last stanza best. Seems more cohesive and rhythmically sound. :nod:

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Everybody wants to be a pirate,
Everybody wants to sail the sea,
Fighting, killing, plundering, and raiding,
Everybody wants to be me!
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We pillage, we plunder, we rifle and loot! Drink up, me 'earties! Yo ho!

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