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My senses

              awaken to a smokescreen of opaque
              gray skies with an acrid odor lingering
              above the city streets--

I

   fall back against white linen sheets
   of my precious niche - letting my mind
   wander into pristine waters--

   and be swept away in its sweet concoctions
   of lullabies - drifting to anywhere in an endless
   stream for one more hour.
©2007-2009 ~LilithLairPoetry
:iconlilithlairpoetry:

Author's Comments

Thanks to *SpokenAubade for the critique and for `PoeticWar trolling of my poem because the "I" looks like a roman numeral...IT'S BLASPHEMY I TELL YE!!

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:iconsiciliangoddess:
that is amazing big bro! I love it the wording is so lovely and very vivid. It is very well done! Good work!! I am proud of you
:iconkikyounokanashii:
I love doing that, combining many random thoughts into one big poem thing.... yeah... awesome-o's.

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Since we met when I was hurt and broken
Once the pain was gone it's almost like we were drifting apart...

A Place of Feeling [link]
:iconjohn-ticklesocks:
That pretty much sums up my mornings. Very nice. :)

--
Bunga louie lee
Said the monkey to the flea
It wasn't much to say
But it passed the time away
------------------------------------
Spike Milligan.
:iconlilithlairpoetry:
Thanks John!

--
News Feed: I start college on Aug. 20th, go me!!! 1600hrs to go before I get my A+ certification...and become a qualified technician..!
:iconlilithlairpoetry:
:D

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News Feed: I start college on Aug. 20th, go me!!! 1600hrs to go before I get my A+ certification...and become a qualified technician..!
:iconlilithlairpoetry:
Awww, thanks hon! :glomp:

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News Feed: I start college on Aug. 20th, go me!!! 1600hrs to go before I get my A+ certification...and become a qualified technician..!
:iconjohn-ticklesocks:
You're most welcome. :)

--
Bunga louie lee
Said the monkey to the flea
It wasn't much to say
But it passed the time away
------------------------------------
Spike Milligan.
:icondisastercake:
:bow: you are the master of imagery!

--
~Allie :frail:
:crazy:

-What if this world is another planet's hell?

*~*~*~:-:~*~*~*
:evillaugh:
Stick that in your juice box and suck it.

:sadangel:
:iconshadowed-angel:
Hehe that's exactly how I feel every day :P
Great job.

--
I really cannot understand why people choose to ignore the "ART" part of deviantART
It's in fucking capitals!
How can you miss it!?

*The-Shadowed-Angel
~jaded-reflection
~kapari

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